J-qb's art Reviews on Newgrounds

[Spoon of Doom]

I dont want to laud you either

but like ash, You did outdo yourself on this one. There could have been a bit more shading on the face, but That is kind of difficult with the way it is cropped. The color in the nose should be a bit darker. The smoke (although it works) isnt really convincing. smoke is terribly difficult to draw, but I think you could have made more of it. The beans could have use stronger shading too (greater contrast, to make those details all a bit more clear. Also: the beans like awefully pale, and the saus looks awefully orange...

all in all, well done

Luwano responds:

I guess, I should try to be more "brave" with shading, because the most common response I get, is that the shading could be a little stronger. I'm overcareful probably and I'm always blending everything together.

I was actually thinking of cropping another part of the chin and most of the nose and draw the mouth even bigger and more intimidating.

You got me there with the smoke. It was some kind of "last minute" decision. But otherwise the beans wouldn't have looked like they were still hot.

I looked up some references of the beans you use for baked beans and they are actually almost white, so that's why I ended up with that pale colour.

And yeah, I could have made the sauce look more viscous and probably add more red to the colours.

Thanks for your review, I'll try to use some of the advice, especially on the shading.

[Two girls, one slasher! Page 3]

I opted giving this a 0 because I feel neglected

but then again, meh.... I like how you drew the slasher and rick on this page, but dont quite like the girls here... the upper lips look like moustaches (or have they been eating each others shit? filthy!) and they look genuinely manly in the last frame. Also; in that last panel they dont appear to look at rick.
I like how the lyrics get out of the frame, but it doesnt really work that well because of the big difference between the black and (quite light) gray backgrounds, making it mildly illegible and messy.

[Two girls one slasher! page 2]

I opted giving this a 0 because I feel neglected

but then again, meh... I like this page a lot more than the first one, I like the placement of the panels with the "slasher" walking in between them. blondies head is a tad huge in the first frame. I feel like the lettering of the smooch and sigh doesnt really fit with the thinlined drawings.
I WONDER WHERE THIS IS GOING!

[Two girls one slasher! Page 1]

I opted giving this a 0 because I feel neglected

but then again meh... Nice lines, some anatomy issues (small body in third panel) teeth too much forward in the fifth panel (actually that whole face is a bit weird). I like how you introduce the cliche setting.
My favourite panel has to be the first one; the framing, perspective use of black. just seems of another level than the other panels. nr.2 and 6 are okay too.
I dislike how the center parting between the 3/4 and the 5/6 is a bit differently placed.

Lundsfryd responds:

Aaah.. That's sweet.. I will be back real soon, then we can catch up :)
I can't do anything but agree with your points. The character inconsistency is the worst part I think. The problem is that I decided to do three mediocre pages instead of just a single good looking one. That was a dumb move. (I will just respond to all your comments here). The second page is also my favorite. The boogyman is quite funny in my opinion, and it was a simple solution that saved me a lot of time. And i actually like the smooch-font. So that one I was happy with. Again i agree with page 3. Everything but the Rick Astley drawing sucks. But I was out of time. Thanks for the feedback, J-qb = AWSOMENESS!! :D

[Tea Time!]

Brilliant

Great composition and perspective, Beautifull colors. Points of improvement: The smoke from the pot could use a bit more definition to make it stand out a bit more. The same goes for his left hand; Im not really sure what it is doing, it would have been cool if it had been holding a teacup.

AbominableGod responds:

yeaah i got lazy.

[Morpho]

Wow

very nice! interesting composition, great use of color and great shading. I would have liked it if the transition from the pink/purple to the light blue was a bit more smooth. I think the big black area on the left wing is a bit to big..

Bryony responds:

yeah i probably shouldn't have interpreted the wings so literally. one of my first times using watercolour, so i'll learn.

[pond]

best of the abbys

I like how this is a bit sharper than some of you other work; like the lighting, but I think you darkened the area next to her left leg/hip a bit too much. Very nice work on the clouds and water, they give a great atmoshpere, the little lensflare you added is that nice finishing touch.
I dont like how the mask seems more rounded/less sharp than in the other pics, and I dont like that she looks like pinocchio. I think that may have something to do with the curvature of the mask, and the angle at which the horns portrude from it.
It would have been nice if you had shown the other horn a bit; itd make sense, seeing as how we have a bit of a top down view of the mask rather than straight from the side.
It would have been nice to show her other arm too; I guess it is possible for her to hold her arm so that we dont see it; but it doesnt look natural.
I cant quite figure out what that worm in the sky is though... looks a bit weird.

Also: come back to the forum!

[Panzer]

Very awesome.

Unlike anything I know from you; which only strengthens my believe that I havent seen enough of you lately...
makes me sad.
anyways, a cool drawing; nice shading/texture. its got a lot of character.

what is it that makes all rhinos look sad...

Lundsfryd responds:

Thanks man .. It sucks being away. Hopefully I will find a pot of gold soon so I can buy a new computer.. I think they look more like they are bored really :P

[Howl]

lovely

I love how you managed to really make it emerge out of the darkness.. Nice work on the squinty eyes/nose too. two points of critique though:
1] It would have been nice if the black spot was a bit broader at the bottom (so that it was more or less a rounded rectangle)
2] Especially on the bottom jaw, It has some problems with shading... it seems to curve inwards instead of outwards. I think this is mostly due to the big fully white areas.
Overall great work!