J-qb's art Reviews on Newgrounds

[Friday Flood #5]

Awesome

Really great work. I love the patterns on his suit; great lightning/shading in this pic. My main problem is that however I look at this, I cant make out how the bunny is supposed to be riding the bike... Is he like hanging at the side of it? The perspective of the windshield of the bike seems a bit off too, which may increase the confusion about the position of the bunny. Anwyas, great work, great design, just wish itd be a bit bigger.

TurkeyOnAStick responds:

Yeah the bike's the main problem. The bunny was meant to be tipping the bike to pull a corner, but when I went back on the drawing it looked odd. As a result, the bunny looks like it's hanging out the side of the bike, rather than laying on top of it.

... but if I forget my original intentions, I'm ok with it.
Cheers for hosting the Flood, Quibbles.

[The Rabbit and the Heart]

Nice un

This might be the first pixelart flood pic... i dunno. Nice colors in this one.
The shading is a bit odd, especially on the bunny, unless thats supposed to be spots on his fur. Otherwise it looks as if the light is coming from below him.
On the sky; Id suggest flipping the gradient (and spacing it a bit more) since the sun is high; the sky would be lighter at the top. (at night, when the sun is below the horizon; the sky is darker at the top)

EventHorizon responds:

Thanks for the review, you're right about the shadows in fact I've done haphazardly, however I will try to improve :)

[Friday Flood]

cool

Nice work, good job in incorporating the thumbnail. Nice colors, although the sky could be a bit more saturated. As Savory said, the arms are a bit short but otherwise good job on the character. I would have liked it if it had a bit more shading other than just the thin strokes along the lines. That could really make the character a bit less flat.
Another point of improvement in the drawing is the perspective on the ground. Looking at the grain/grass you drew in front; the horizon should be a lot lower, and it probably shouldnt curve that much. As it is now it gives the idea the the foreground (character/grass) are seperated from the background.
Good job!

SirCannabisClock responds:

Many thanks for the feedback

Character: Dully noted, I know I tend to fault when it comes to shading since it looks bad without lines.

BG: I know, I should have spent more time on it. I hate doing BGs.

Originally it was larger(the back-background you said needed to be smaller). I ended up shrinking it down to half size, and it still seems it wasn't good enough.

[Aftermath]

WOOO

congrats on the fp! Great work on the depth in this one, good job distinguishing detailed/rough areas. I think you could have probably kicked up some contrasts a bit. Also; the perspective on the guys on the right seems a bit off. It could be right, just seems a tiny bit off.

Occluded responds:

Thanks man. Your notes were really helpful. As always. I'll definitely take another look at it in a couple weeks when I have some distance on it. And I'll see if I can punch the contrast, and see what's weird about those guys. My brother said they threw him a bit too.

[Fished]

Great work man

The teeth bursting through the water really help, and you did it really well. I dont really have any critique on this. Its a great piece. The only thing that seems a bit odd to me are the eyes... I cant really make out if they have a translucent lens on top of them or something or what it is...

Occluded responds:

Thanks J-qb. Thanks for all your input on stickam too. It is meant to be a translucent lens that is nearly completely clear. You can see a bit of a glow throughout. But with the water over it maybe all you really see is the hard refraction near the edges. I could still see the cloudy fill, but maybe I had been looking at it too long. Thanks for the critiques man.

[Deep sea lurker]

Quite good

Quite good but I dont really like it; it looks quite messy with all the different colors and stuff. great work on the eye.

Havegum responds:

Messy is what I thought too, plus I don't like the line quality outlining it. Thanks for the review!
Happy friday flood!

[Loloctopus]

GRRREAT!

Great drawing. Nice coloring on the octopus and drawing etc. a bit sloppy at some of the edges.
The olive and icecube, although very well done, dont really add anything to the pic.
I think you couldve made the water and glass a bit more translucent so that a bit more red would be visible behind it.

Fifty-50 responds:

Yup, your right about the ice cubes. Thank you.

[Green Flash]

Nice but perspective issues

Like other poeple mentioned, this has some perspective issues, not gonna go into that anymore though.
The writing in the sand looks really good, but the shading on the heart seems a bit off. I like the shadows of the clouds on the water, although the shadow of the rigth cloud should be placed more towards the right.
I think composition wise it would have been nice to have more sand; It is the main part of the drawing after all but now it gets pushed out by the big sea a bit. I also think you should have placed the friday flood icon somewhere else.
The clouds look a bit too solid, for future reference google some pics. Clouds are actually pretty easy to draw once you know how to.

Good work, I might be a bit harsh but you really are improving a lot and I think you can handle it.

Luwano responds:

Thanks for the advice. I think more sand would have made my life easier indeed. Apart from what you said it would have been easier to make the footprints look like the person had to walk some steps without fucking up the perspective. :P

Good to hear that I'm improving and yes I can definitely take your critique, it's helpful. Thanks!

[Friday Flood baked bean]

It certainly looks baked

This one is cute, funny... I cant really tell what is going on but I guess thats allright. I like how you put in these really small beans, but it would have been nice if you had drawn them at 2x zoom/size, so that they would be a bit sharper.
The main problem with this one is the lack of definition. Some areas are allright, but all in all it lacks sharpness, which makes it even less clear what is hapening.
Nother problem is the shading; its basically allright, but some areas are really weird, e.g. at the right side of the big bean, there is a light aread that I cant really relate to. same at the bottom of the grey thing; it is darker, but then the bottom ridge is darker.

ZaneZansorrow responds:

I'll remember to save a bigger size next time and also practice on clear sharpness and also also practice source of light >3>...