J-qb's art Reviews on Newgrounds

[Friday Flood Fish]

Really nice

Well done ashman, youre really starting to get somewhere with your art. great work on this fish although there are some messy spots that you couldve easily fixed (highlight at end of tail, whiskers). Nice work on the colors although it would have been nice if the background had been a slightly different color from the fish.
The way his head sits on his neck is a bit weird; his neck seems to bend upwards (on the canvas), but his head is angled down(on canvas).
Composition wise I would have been nice to have some 200 pixels extra below the fish; not just for the fin.
The bubbles have already been mentioned, but Ill mention them again.
One last thing I cant really place is that really bright line on his nose... looks weird to me.

All in all a great job

[Water spirit]

Could use some work.

As you say yourself, its horribly unfinished. The background makes no real sense, things further away should be blurred more, not sharper; Apart from these three trees there really is not background, and I think it might have been better without any background at all. I like how you tried to have some movement, but its inconsistently applied. her face should be a bit lower (or she has a really long chin).
Other than that there is not a lot I can say bout this as it is right now.

[9th and Hennepin]

Great perspective!

I quite like this drawing, although its a bit simplistic perhaps (shading wise etc.)
I love how you did the perspective, works really well, anatomy seems okay. Only her right upper arm should bend "downwards" a bit though. You managed to make her look really wet, which is good.
The main problem I have with this is the ripples in the water; the strong white lines and the sheer abundance of them makes the drawing a bit messy. Other than that, great work.

[Friday Flood 3]

Messzy

I cant really wrap this up nicely, but I dont like this. Its pretty messy. What shading there is, is good, but there should be more of it, and more contrast.
I think what happened here is that you bit off more than you could chew. Theres a lot going on, with some really tricky stuff (that energy being, a fireball, shiny fishes, fur...). I suggest you try drawing some simple stuff, in the future, you will probably get more satisfactory results. Take a look at ashman`s pic; its fairly simple, only one fish. But by focusing on that he did get a better overall drawing.

[Friday Flood #3!]

IT BURNS LIKE THE EYE OF SAURON!

Great work, lovely colors. I like to boldness you used to draw this.
He is standing pretty damn far away from that wall, seems a bit odd but not really a problem. I love how you drew the fish but the ripples in that puddle beneath him really sucks... I think the drawing as a whole would look better without it, wont point out all the things that are wrong with it, cause im pretty sure you know it all.
The puddle seems to be a bit off perspective wise

[Green Flash]

Nice but perspective issues

Like other poeple mentioned, this has some perspective issues, not gonna go into that anymore though.
The writing in the sand looks really good, but the shading on the heart seems a bit off. I like the shadows of the clouds on the water, although the shadow of the rigth cloud should be placed more towards the right.
I think composition wise it would have been nice to have more sand; It is the main part of the drawing after all but now it gets pushed out by the big sea a bit. I also think you should have placed the friday flood icon somewhere else.
The clouds look a bit too solid, for future reference google some pics. Clouds are actually pretty easy to draw once you know how to.

Good work, I might be a bit harsh but you really are improving a lot and I think you can handle it.

Luwano responds:

Thanks for the advice. I think more sand would have made my life easier indeed. Apart from what you said it would have been easier to make the footprints look like the person had to walk some steps without fucking up the perspective. :P

Good to hear that I'm improving and yes I can definitely take your critique, it's helpful. Thanks!

[Night Dip - Flood the Portal 3]

nice

Good ambient piece. Like how you did the water, although im not sure how you did it? if you painted it on by hand I like it, but it kinda looks like two layers rendered cloud that you stretched; in which case I like it less.
The hair looks really wet thats good. The ripples in the water dont really work well although the serve their goal. It would have been nice if the reflection had been blurred or morphed a bit rather than just straight on reflecting the girl.

[Mulla the Fisherman]

GO GET YOURSELF A GOVERNMENT!

Really nice drawing, Great simplicity, but detail where needed. The face is great, turban looks a bit flat though, nice work on the hands too. Not sure if I like the moon, I think it might have been better without it, or if it had merged in with the background a bit more perhaps. I like the background, simple but effective.
I dont like how you made the water curve up, it makes it look less like water, especially since the ripples are flat..
Good work

[Marilyn Invaders]

DAMN RIGHT I WANT TO FIGHT ABOUT IT!

GIMME THAT SKATEBOARD! I WANT IT!
nice work; that white dot on her nose is a bit weird and im not too excited about the invader that is on her eye... otherwise great work though; love the black and white.
I like the one on paper too, possibly even more; although I dont really like that line you used for the nose.

[Beany bean bean bean]

WOMAN!

I DONT WANT YOUR BEANS!
SO I like this guys pose; although his left arm and leg could use a bit more clarity; its not automatically clear what is happening there. I like how you did this with only harsh transitions, quite a feat, although I think you could have done better.
Lightning is a bit all over the place I think you could have done a lot better on that.
All in all, Good concept, but still rough around the edges.